Thursday, April 22, 2010

50 Words #42

TITLE: The Final Lie
GENRE: Suspense

Of all the places to get lost. Stupid. Stupid. Stupid. Nathan banged his head with the palm of his hand and glared at the worthless piece of junk called a GPS. A dead-end in the section of town known for its murders. Ya, not the smartest place to drive into.

8 comments:

  1. Good imagery and a good hook for those who tend to distrust certain techy things. I would read more.

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  2. I can really feel this. Been there, done that. I'm hooked.

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  3. Hooked. Strong voice. "Ya" bothers me, though. "Yeah?"

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  4. I think I remember this one. I'd read on to see what happens. Agree with Jill on "Ya" vs. "Yeah"

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  5. Hooked . . . I agree about the "Ya" thing too.

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  6. The one question that popped for me is why the guy needs a GPS in a section of town he's familiar with. But perhaps that gets explained next.

    Still, I'm hooked!

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  7. Nice voice and imagery. Agree on the "Ya".

    I'd read more.

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  8. "Ya" is soooo, like, Valley Girl, you know? I doubt Nathan is going for that effect. Would read on. Can totally relate to the situation.

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