Thursday, March 25, 2010

30 YA

TITLE: THE UNBECOMING OF MARA DYER
GENRE: YA


My name is not Mara Dyer, but my lawyer told me I had to choose something.

46 comments:

  1. This is a great one. Really grabs me.

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  2. Love the title and I'm hooked...

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  3. Definitely want to know why a lawyer's involved in the first sentence! The title's intriguing too.

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  4. Who's the lawyer, and why's she got to choose? Definitely would keep reading this one.

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  5. I want to read this one!! Please tell me it's getting published soon.

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  6. I usually don't read YA, but if I saw this first sentence, I'd buy this book. Hooked for sure!

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  7. Hooked! It's amazing how one sentence can spark so many questions.

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  8. I really like this. I'd definitely read on.

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  9. Yes, this one is a definite hook :)

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  10. Not hooked. I've seen a similar start in another contest. But it was a social worker, I think.

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  11. Ok. I'd read more...its a little loose, but I'd read on.

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  12. It's a winner! That sentence with the title opens up a world of questions!

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  13. Hooked. There are several questions that'll grab the reader with that line (what is her name? Why does she have a lawyer in the first place?)

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  14. Definitely hooked. No wasted words here!

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  15. Reel me in, because I'm hooked!

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  16. Totally hooked.
    I want to know more. Why does she need another name? What is her real name?

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  17. Great opening. Definitely want to find out more.

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  18. Completely hooked! I need to know more!

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  19. I agree and disagree with Stina Lindenblatt - I've seen a similar start on another site, too, but I think it works.

    UPDATE: I remembered where I saw something similar - on Nathan Bransford's most recent first paragraph contest - and went and looked it up. And lo and behold, that entry was yours, too:) So I guess you've got something really memorable here.

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  20. Definitely hooked! I'd love to know more about "Mara"...

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  21. Hooked! Why can't she go by her real name and why does she have a lawyer? I love the title.

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  22. Yup, hooked. Love the title, too.

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