Thursday, March 25, 2010

30 YA

TITLE: THE UNBECOMING OF MARA DYER
GENRE: YA


My name is not Mara Dyer, but my lawyer told me I had to choose something.

46 comments:

Holly Bodger said...

Love it...hooked!

Kristin Celms said...

This is a great one. Really grabs me.

Angela said...

Love the title and I'm hooked...

Steve said...

Definitely want to know why a lawyer's involved in the first sentence! The title's intriguing too.

Amy Bennett said...

Definitely hooked!

Anna said...

Who's the lawyer, and why's she got to choose? Definitely would keep reading this one.

Jodi Meadows said...

Yep.

Empty Refrigerator said...

I want to read this one!! Please tell me it's getting published soon.

WyndyDay said...

Hooked. :)

Juli Page Morgan said...

I usually don't read YA, but if I saw this first sentence, I'd buy this book. Hooked for sure!

Teresa N said...

Hooked! It's amazing how one sentence can spark so many questions.

Laurie said...

I'm hooked too!

Catherine Kariaxi said...

Yes, definitely hooked<:

Selestial said...

I really like this. I'd definitely read on.

Breeze said...

Yes, this one is a definite hook :)

A.L. Sonnichsen said...

Totally hooked. Great opening.

Stina Lindenblatt said...

Not hooked. I've seen a similar start in another contest. But it was a social worker, I think.

Chantal Kirkland said...

Ok. I'd read more...its a little loose, but I'd read on.

Katee said...

Hooked.

coffeelvnmom said...

Hooked.

Sandra Ulbrich Almazan said...

I like this one.

Valerie said...

Hooked!

Walter said...

You've got me hooked.

samsevern said...

HOOKED!! BIG-TIME! ㋡

Shannon O'Donnell said...

Yep! I'm hooked. :-)

smr said...

hooked!

Bane of Anubis said...

Great.

Sophia said...

Hooked!

Casey McCormick said...

Hooked.

Barbara said...

It's a winner! That sentence with the title opens up a world of questions!

falconesse said...

Hooked. There are several questions that'll grab the reader with that line (what is her name? Why does she have a lawyer in the first place?)

Iris said...

Hooked.

Vicki Tremper said...

Intrigued.

Derek Whisman said...

Haha. Love this.

MK said...

Hooked!

Carol Newman Cronin said...

Definitely hooked. No wasted words here!

Em said...

Reel me in, because I'm hooked!

Christi said...

Totally hooked.
I want to know more. Why does she need another name? What is her real name?

Stella said...

Great opening. Definitely want to find out more.

Jessica said...

Completely hooked! I need to know more!

Krista V. (the former Krista G.) said...

I agree and disagree with Stina Lindenblatt - I've seen a similar start on another site, too, but I think it works.

UPDATE: I remembered where I saw something similar - on Nathan Bransford's most recent first paragraph contest - and went and looked it up. And lo and behold, that entry was yours, too:) So I guess you've got something really memorable here.

Mel said...

Definitely hooked! I'd love to know more about "Mara"...

Amanda said...

Hooked! Why can't she go by her real name and why does she have a lawyer? I love the title.

Jess said...

Hooked! :)

Miss Aspirant said...

Great opening!

Merc said...

Yup, hooked. Love the title, too.