TITLE: THE UNBECOMING OF MARA DYER
GENRE: YA
My name is not Mara Dyer, but my lawyer told me I had to choose something.
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46 comments:
Love it...hooked!
This is a great one. Really grabs me.
Love the title and I'm hooked...
Definitely want to know why a lawyer's involved in the first sentence! The title's intriguing too.
Definitely hooked!
Who's the lawyer, and why's she got to choose? Definitely would keep reading this one.
Yep.
I want to read this one!! Please tell me it's getting published soon.
Hooked. :)
I usually don't read YA, but if I saw this first sentence, I'd buy this book. Hooked for sure!
Hooked! It's amazing how one sentence can spark so many questions.
I'm hooked too!
Yes, definitely hooked<:
I really like this. I'd definitely read on.
Yes, this one is a definite hook :)
Totally hooked. Great opening.
Not hooked. I've seen a similar start in another contest. But it was a social worker, I think.
Ok. I'd read more...its a little loose, but I'd read on.
Hooked.
Hooked.
I like this one.
Hooked!
You've got me hooked.
HOOKED!! BIG-TIME! ㋡
Yep! I'm hooked. :-)
hooked!
Great.
Hooked!
Hooked.
It's a winner! That sentence with the title opens up a world of questions!
Hooked. There are several questions that'll grab the reader with that line (what is her name? Why does she have a lawyer in the first place?)
Hooked.
Intrigued.
Haha. Love this.
Hooked!
Definitely hooked. No wasted words here!
Reel me in, because I'm hooked!
Totally hooked.
I want to know more. Why does she need another name? What is her real name?
Great opening. Definitely want to find out more.
Completely hooked! I need to know more!
I agree and disagree with Stina Lindenblatt - I've seen a similar start on another site, too, but I think it works.
UPDATE: I remembered where I saw something similar - on Nathan Bransford's most recent first paragraph contest - and went and looked it up. And lo and behold, that entry was yours, too:) So I guess you've got something really memorable here.
Definitely hooked! I'd love to know more about "Mara"...
Hooked! Why can't she go by her real name and why does she have a lawyer? I love the title.
Hooked! :)
Great opening!
Yup, hooked. Love the title, too.
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