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This is a great one. Really grabs me.
Love the title and I'm hooked...
Definitely want to know why a lawyer's involved in the first sentence! The title's intriguing too.
Who's the lawyer, and why's she got to choose? Definitely would keep reading this one.
I want to read this one!! Please tell me it's getting published soon.
I usually don't read YA, but if I saw this first sentence, I'd buy this book. Hooked for sure!
Hooked! It's amazing how one sentence can spark so many questions.
I'm hooked too!
Yes, definitely hooked<:
I really like this. I'd definitely read on.
Yes, this one is a definite hook :)
Totally hooked. Great opening.
Not hooked. I've seen a similar start in another contest. But it was a social worker, I think.
Ok. I'd read more...its a little loose, but I'd read on.
I like this one.
You've got me hooked.
HOOKED!! BIG-TIME! ㋡
Yep! I'm hooked. :-)
It's a winner! That sentence with the title opens up a world of questions!
Hooked. There are several questions that'll grab the reader with that line (what is her name? Why does she have a lawyer in the first place?)
Haha. Love this.
Definitely hooked. No wasted words here!
Reel me in, because I'm hooked!
Totally hooked.I want to know more. Why does she need another name? What is her real name?
Great opening. Definitely want to find out more.
Completely hooked! I need to know more!
I agree and disagree with Stina Lindenblatt - I've seen a similar start on another site, too, but I think it works.UPDATE: I remembered where I saw something similar - on Nathan Bransford's most recent first paragraph contest - and went and looked it up. And lo and behold, that entry was yours, too:) So I guess you've got something really memorable here.
Definitely hooked! I'd love to know more about "Mara"...
Hooked! Why can't she go by her real name and why does she have a lawyer? I love the title.
Yup, hooked. Love the title, too.